Wednesday, 22 March 2017

My Real Writing - My Edited Writing

                            My Real Writing


Pt england School  is in a beautiful part of auckland city in the tamaki community. Where kids can learn and also teachers.


Pt England School is a special place for me because it is a place for me to learn about many different thing. Like Reading , Writing , Maths , Te Reo Maori and Sports. The teachers at Pt england school really help with these kind of things. I also come to school to see my friends.


Another way Pt england school is a special place for me is that my reading and writing teacher Mr Wiseman ,  helps me with those things so that I can become a better learner. When I struggle with my reading or writing I can always go to Mr Wiseman to help me if I’m stuck.


Furthermore , my maths teacher Ms Tapuke can help me with maths when I need it. but most times I can do it on my own or with a buddy. In maths Ms Tapuke teach me and the rest of the student about divided bys , multiplication , addition , subtraction , algebra and many more.


Moreover My Te Reo Maori teacher Whea Saf helps me with maori and also in kapahaka. In kapahaka she teaches us waiatas and actions for when we go perform somewhere or even if we have important thing at PES like prizegiving gladiators of change and many more.


Last but not least Miss Va’afusuaga. Miss Va’afusuaga is kinda like Whea Saf but different she is a sports teacher. She takes many different sports like , Netball , Rugby , Touch , Softball , Cricket and many more other sports and activities. Miss Va’afusuaga is a hard working teacher.


Everything I have listed here is why I have picked PES to be my special place. The teacher here at PES is what I look forward to everyday and also learning. Learning is a really big part of my life and this is where I can do it.

My Edited Writing


Pt England School  is in a beautiful part of Auckland city in the Tamaki community. Pt England School is where kids can go to learn about many different things.


Pt England School is a special place for me because it is a place for me to learn about many different things. Just like Reading , Writing , Maths , Te Reo Maori and sports. The teachers at Pt England School really help with these kinds of things. I also come to school to see my friends.


Another way Pt England School is a special place for me is that my Reading and Writing teacher Mr Wiseman. Helps me with those things so that I can become a better learner. When I struggle with my Reading or Writing I can always go to Mr Wiseman to help me if I’m stuck. But I’m not really into Reading or Writing.


Furthermore , my Maths teacher Ms Tapuke helps me with Maths when I need it. But most of the times I can do it on my own or with a buddy. In Maths Ms Tapuke teaches me and the rest of the student about divided bys , Multiplication , Addition , Subtraction , Algebra and many more. Maths is my favourite subject.


Moreover My Te Reo Maori teacher Whea Saf helps me with Maori and also in Kapa Haka. In Kapa Haka she teaches us waiatas and actions for when we go perform somewhere or even if we have important thing at Pt England School like prizegiving gladiators of change and many more.


Last but not least Miss Va’afusuaga. Miss Va’afusuaga is kinda like Whea Saf but different she is a sports teacher. Instead she takes sports like , Netball , Rugby , Touch , Softball , Cricket and many more other sports and activities. Miss Va’afusuaga is a hard working sports teacher.


Everything I have listed here is why I have picked Pt England School to be my special place. The teacher here at Pt England School is what I look forward to everyday and also learning. Learning is a really big part of my life and this is where I can do it.


Here you will see I have put my real writing up that have mistakes in it and I have my edited writing where I have fixed up my mistakes. Please free to leave a comment of a question or even something I have missed out in my editing writing.


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